广州雅思5月作文培训班 今年5月26号考雅思,应该怎么复习呢?目前有剑桥雅思3...

雅思作文的满分是9分，所以5分只能算是一个及格分数吧！那么达到这个分数难不难呢？下面就和的我一起来看看雅思作文5分如何达到？

Task2：

Nowadays， there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and  what extent do you agree or disagree？

如今，媒体报道的趋势更侧重于报道社会问题和突发事件，而忽视社会的积极发展。一些人认为这对于个人和社会都是有害的。你是否同意这种观点？

改前解析：

这是一篇媒体话题类大作文，题目类型为Opinion Question 观点型。

题目特点：一般此类问题问你是否赞同题目所表述的观点，赞同不赞同或者一部分赞同，都需要给出具体的原因和解释。

具体的构思流程，Vicky在往期推送：中已经提到，童鞋们可以再复习一遍哦！

下面我们来看一篇考鸭的范文，

擦亮你的眼睛来找茬吧！

考生范文：

The current phenomenon of media overly focus on reporting issues and emergencies rather than positive developmentshave turned the spotlight on whether it is a positive or negative  me，this could be beneficial for individuals but might be harmful to society as a whole.

Receiving accurate information of emergencies and problems could give individuals warnings. For instance， informuion including environmental problems such as air pollution is vital to pass on to the public through media. Without such information， people might keep polluting the environment until there is no solution and the world would become unlivable. Besides ， delivering important emergency warnings in time could save people＇s lives. For example，in China，  thousands of people evacuated in time before the flood came in June 1998 merely because tv and radios broadcasted the emergency warning the night before the flooding. Therefore， delivering information regards to issues and emergencies is beneficial to individuals.

However，media＇s overly focus on pmblems and emergencies could lead to panic and chaos in society. There is a board consensus that public panic could result in unnecessary catastrophic chaos in society. Take the incident in Wuxi China as an example. In July 2021， a reporter in a local TV station reported a story about how the local factory has polluted the water source by pouring toxic chemicals into the river. Overnight， all the bottled water in the supermarkets was cleared out by local residents. Some people， misled by the media and filled with fears， even started a fight with the others in a shop over a bottle of water. That incident led to twenty-five *s and one child injured. Later the government issued a statement indicating that the amount of chemicals poured in the river was so *all that it could not cause any serious health damage to human bodies. Accordingly， it is the media which spreading rumors about emergencies and problems that could harm the society.

In a nutshell，delivering reports which focus on problems and emergencies could be advantageous to individuals， nevertheless， it could also be harmful to society as a whole.

你能找出几处错误？

你给这篇作文打几分？

下面来看看Vicky如何精改，

同学们不仅要注意识别丢分点，

还要学习和积累其中的高分表达哦！

精改范文：

第一段：

The current phenomenon of media overly ❶focusfocusing on reporting issues and emergencies rather than positive developments ❷ have hasturned the spotlight onwhether it is a positive or negative trend.主观点❸To me In my opinion，this could be beneficial for individuals but might be harmful to society as a whole.

错误：

❶动词形式使用错误，真正的谓语动词为 turned，此处应使用动名词形式。

❷该句的主语为the phenomenon，谓语动词应使用单数形式，改为has；

❸ To me 属于非正式的口语化用语，应改为正式性语言In my opinion；

亮点：turned the spotlight on 把焦点集中在......

重新改述了题目并明确给出了自己的观点。

第二段：

论点1Receiving accurate information ❶ofabout emergencies and problems could ❷givehelp warnindividuals and enable them to prepare ings. For instance，information ❸ includingregardingenvironmental problems such as air pollution is vital to pass on to the public through ❹the media. Without such information， people might keep polluting the environment until there is no solution and the world ❺ would becomebecomes unlivable.论点2❻Besides，In addition，delivering important emergency warnings in time could save people＇s  example，in China， thousands of people ❼ wereevacuated（v. 疏散；撤出）in timebefore theaflood camehitin June 1998 merely because ❽ tvtelevisions and radios broadcasted the emergency warning the night before the efore，delivering information ❾withregard toissues and emergencies is beneficialto individuals.

错误：

❶ about用在这里更恰当。

❷ 原句过于笼统，改动后的信息更加具体和完整。

❸ 根据句意，regarding更为合适；

❹ the media特指的是一个*名词，包括电视、报纸、其他传播信息的形式，应该使用冠词the；

❺ 时态要前后统一，这句前面用的是there is 为一般现在时，所以后面应该保持时态一致。

❻ besides 属于非正式用语，不适合用于学术写作中，应该为in addition；

❼ 根据句意，应该是“人被疏散”，所以增加be动词were；因为具体指的是1998年的一次洪水，所以用不定冠词a； 洪水等自然灾难来袭，用hit比较地道；

❽ 首先TV应该大写，其次在正式写作中，不应使用缩略简称等形式，应该使用书面语；

❾ with regard to 为固定搭配，adv.关于；至于；

亮点：考生在这段的论述结构值得各位考鸭学习。

整段围绕开头段的主观点展开，阐述了两个分论点并以具体例子加以证明，最后再次强调了自己的观点。

第三段：

论点1However，the media＇s ❶overly focusover-focus on pmblems and emergencies could lead to panic and chaos in e is a ❷boardbroad consensusthat public panic could result in ❸unnecessary catastrophic chaos in societypeople being injured or even  the incident in Wuxi，China，as an  July 2021， a reporter in a local TV station reported a story about how ❹ thealocal factory ❺hashadpolluted the water source by pouring toxic chemicals into the river. Overnight，all the bottled water in the supermarkets was cleared out by local residents（精彩句子） people， misled by the media and filled with fears，even started a fight ❻with the othersin a shop over a bottle of water. ❼ThatThisincident led to ❽twenty-five25 *s and one child ❾ being injured. Later，the government issued a statement indicating that the amount of chemicals poured in the river was so *all that it could not cause any serious health damage to human bodies. ➓ Accordingly，it is the media whichspreading rumors about emergencies and problems thatcould harm thesociety.

错误：

❶ 前面为名词所有格＇s形式，后面应为名词性成分，而overly focus为动词形式，所以应改为over-focus；

❷ 词语混淆错误，很多考生都容易将一些形近词误用，再次提醒大家写作时务必要注意区别，拼写准确；broad consensus 是常用搭配，表示＂广泛共识＂的意思。

❸ 这一句与前面的句子太相似，语意重复，应该使用多样化的表达，进行同义替换；另外catastrophic chaos有“词语堆砌”之感，不是native speaker常用的地道表达，应改成具体生动的信息。

❹ 因为并没有特指某一家工厂，而且当地不仅一家工厂，所以是泛指，应使用不定冠词a；

❺ 该句是指过去的报道，根据句意应该使用过去完成时。

❻ with the others在这里没有必要，可去掉；

❼ that不太正式，并且在英语中一般常使用指示代词this来描述所说的事件，更加客观；

❽表示1-10的数字时，应该用对应的英语单词one-ten；表示11以上的数字直接用*数字即可；

❾ being injured表示受伤这种状态；

➓ which在这里是多余的；另外这里并没有具体指一个社会，应该去掉定冠词the；

亮点：考生的观点比较全面，在之前的主体段中给出了自己的主要观点，同时在这段中也阐述了“不实报道会带来的问题”，并以生动的例子加以证明。段落中还有一些精彩句子值得模仿学习哦！

第四段：

In ❶a nutshellconclusion，delivering reports ❷whichthat focus on problems and emergencies could beadvantageousto individuals❸；nevertheless，it could also be harmful to society as a whole.

错误：

❶ 这是一个非正式短语，在学术写作中尽量避免使用习语和一些陈词滥调的表达。

❷ 关于which和that，非特殊条件下，中国学生一般习惯互换，但其实两者之间还是有使用差别的，用which时，表示你说的情况适用于你谈论的所有事物；而用that时，只适用于你说的一些事物；

举个栗子，

All Dalmatians（n. 斑点狗），whichhave spots， are good pets.

这个句子中，我们知道斑点狗都有斑点，这里用which表达适用于所说的事物；并且whichhave spots和主语用逗号隔开；

Dogsthathave spots are good pets.

这个句子就是特指有斑点的狗，所有用that表示部分情况，且与主语间没有逗号。

作文中，delivering reports 后面所说的情况是部分类型的报道，因此应使用that。

❸ 两种观点间应用分号隔开。

亮点：总结段很简洁并且全面，还使用了一些高分词汇。

Vicky点评：

亮点：

该考生的文章结构和对写作任务的处理还算恰当，大部分例子中的过渡性短语比较准确，清晰地表明了不同观点间的关系；

个别句子的表达也很出色，用到一些高分词汇，已经用绿色标注，大家可以借鉴学习。

主要问题是：

1.存在语法和词汇错误，包括时态、冠词、介词、谓语动词单复数、词语混淆等，

2.一些非正式用语错误，包括缩写、简称、俗语等，各位小伙伴在平时的写作练习中一定要注意检查纠错，切莫让这些小问题积少成多，导致严重扣分！

你好，一定要好好利用剑桥4―8来按时的练习听力和阅读！
听力：争取听3遍以上，没事了就听真题，对于你熟悉语境和语速，内容很有帮助。听力原文最好可以看看，里面的一些小词都是很有可能考到的。
阅读：按时间练速度。文章中出现的生词可以在做完题后再识记。每天最好能做一套题，剑7,8最后做，因为最新，和现在的考试也最接近。做题时，眼睛快，笔要勤，看的时候及时勾画一些知识点，实在没有把握的题可以放弃，不要浪费时间。先做MATCHING 类型的题，然后填空，T F NG类的题最后做，没有时间了可以蒙。
作文：大作文：犯罪，教育，社会，*几大常类作文，最好能每类写一篇练笔。
小作文：分类清，句式较固定，比较好准备。
但由于你的时间很紧迫了，所以读读剑4-8后面的范文以及高分的文章，积累一些有用词汇和高分句型。考前可上网查找预测的作文题目，可以构思下。预测很多，准确率也不是很高，但看看拓展思路没有坏处。
口语：P1部分都比较简单，有关个人生活的问题，如果口语差不多的话一般没有什么大问题。
P2分为事件，地点，人物，物品四大类，准备时一定要学会合并内容，比如，描述你的一位小学老师，描述你敬佩的人，描述一个上年纪的人，描述一个给你很大帮助的人，描述一个说其他国家语言的人等，这些你都可以合并为 描述一个小学教过你的外教。只要合情合理即可。
P3范围涉及社会生活各方面，比较难准备，但一般都是以P2部分扩散开来的内容。所以，平时多读英语刊物增加知识有好处。
另外，口语预测很值得看，考前1星期左右可关注网上的口语预测，考口语的当天可在网上找当天同一城市先考的口语题，对口语准备都有很大帮助。
雅思考试不同于国内考试，还是希望你能够有充分的时间好好准备。
希望你考试顺利!

一， 时间安排

雅思写作要求考生在一个小时之内完成一篇至少 150 个单词的说明文或信件( 20 分钟)和一篇至少 250 个单词的议论文( 40
分钟)。考生需合理安排时间。

疑问：先写 Task1 还是 Task 2 ?

小马过河建议考生先简后难， Task 1 尽量控制在 20 分钟内完成，然后安心写 Task 2 。所以考生在考前一定要多练多写，掌握时间。

二， 字数

雅思写作字数是有下限的，但没有上限，所以很多考生都有疑问，到底多少单词的文章可以拿到高分。当然这没有绝对的限制，但据统计看来，大多数的高分小作文字数都在
180 左右，而大作文也在 280 左右。

疑问：字数不够怎么办?

就 Task 1 而言，说明该考生对图表的分析能力还有待提高，多练习看图审题构思。如果 Task 2
字数不够，说明考生思路不开阔，论据无法扩展，考生需增加阅读量，多看和雅思写作话题相近的文章和精读雅思范文来掌握论据扩展方法。

三， 标题与格式

雅思的大小作文都不需要题目。雅思写作有两种格式：一是空行不空格式，即文章每段开头顶格写，段与段之间空一行;二是空格不空行，即除首段顶格外，文章每段开头空五个字符，段与段之间不空行。

四，机经

雅思考试是非常系统而且专业的语言水平测试，它有着庞大的题库，有些题目也会重复出现，所以考生可以通过了解以往考题，即机经充分把握写作题型、话题等，为考试做好充分准备。

疑问：要不要背范文?

背范文对提高考生的英语语言水平有很大帮助，但考生要明确背范文的目的是吸收其中的精华，如观点、语言、结构等，而不是在考试时遇到相同题目全盘照搬，否则被考官发现，将影响最后的得分。

1）2008.1.10（旧题回放）
Some people think children’s spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it is bad. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
（2）2008.1.12（旧题回放）
Some people think that criminals should be given longer terms in prison, so as to reduce the crime rate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
（3）2008.1.19（新题初现）
Old generations often hold some traditional ideas on the correct way of life, thinking and behavior. However, some people think that it is not helpful for the young generations to prepare for modern life in the future. What’s your opinion?
（4）1.26（新题初现）
Unemployment is getting increasingly serious in many countries. Some people think students only need to get primary education, while others think secondary education is necessary. What’s your opinion?
（5）2008.2.2（语义升格）
Some people think people can exploit animals for any purpose they need, while others do not think so. What is your opinion?
（6）2008.2.14（语义降格）
An increasing number of people choose to live in big cities. What problems will this bring about? Should the government encourage people to live in *all towns?
（7）2008.2.16（新题初现）
An American film actor once said ,“Tomorrow is important and precious. ”Some people think individuals and society should pay more attention to the future than to the present. Do you agree or disagree?
（8）2008.2.23（语义升格）
Some people think imported food exerts positive impacts on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
（9）2008.3.1（新题初现）
Schools offer a wide range of courses such as physical education, music, economics, philosophy, math, English，geography, physics and history. Among all these subjects, which one do you think is the most important and which one is the least important?
（10）2008.3.8（新题初现）
The number of cars keeps increasing, so road systems should be expanded. Some people think the government should pay for it, while others think the car owners should pay for it. What’s your opinion?
（11）2008.3.13（新题初现）
People should look after their health as a duty to the society they live in rather than personal benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(12)2008.3.29（新题初现）
Some people think government should ensure the healthy lifestyle. of people, but others argue that it should be decided by individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
(13)2008.4.5（旧题回放）
Aircraft uses more fuel than cars and produces more pollution. Some people suggest the non-essential use of aircraft like international travel should be discouraged. Do you agree or disagree?
(14)2008.4.12（语义升格）
More working people are busy with work and have no enough time to spend with their family and friends. Why does this happen? What are the effects on family life and society as a whole?
(15)2008.4.19（新题初现）
Figures show that some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of the population who are aged 15 or younger. What do you think are the current and future effects of this may be for those countries?
(16)2008.4. 24（语义升格）
Teachers used to convey information, but now with wide resources of information, there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. Do you agree or disagree?
(17)2008.5.10（旧题回放）
Some children can learn efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, they should be encouraged to watch TV both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(18)2008.5.22（旧题回放）
Some people think that schools should concentrate on academic classes, because they are helpful for future career. But they think music and sports classes are not useful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(19)2008.5.31（新题初现）
Some people argue that the fittest and strongest individuals and teams can achieve the greatest success in sports. But other people think the success is much related to the mental attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
(20)2008.6.5（旧题回放）
Some people think that university students should specialize in one subject, while others think universities should encourage students to learn a rang of subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
(21)2008.6.14（语义升格）
Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
(22)2008.6.21（新题初现）
Some people think that children should obey rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do, but others think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems well by themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
(23)2008.6.28(语义降格)
With technology speeding up, more and more young people begin to use mobile phones and the Internet, but old people have little chance to be exposed to them. What ways could mobile phone and the Internet be useful to old people? How do old people be encouraged to use this new technology?
(24)2008.7.5 (语义降格)
Some people think students should learn more practical courses like computer, but others think they should learn more about theoretical courses like geography and mathematics. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
（25）2008.7.12（新题初现）
Some people support development of agriculture, like factory farming and scientific creation of fruits and vegetables, while others oppose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
（26）2008.7.24（新题初现）
Some people think that in the modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other，while others say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
分析：Independent: 1. Sophisticated science and technology renders it possible to perform. daily tasks like shopping, banking, all by ourselves. 举例扩展甚至可以使用tele-commuting and tele-educatioin 2.Concept of people has changes, which means family ties or bond is weaker now. Seldom can we see four generations living under the same roof. Meanwhile, boom of nursing homes proves this too.
Dependent: Globalization is an unavoidable trend.联想世界是不是相互依赖的更多了呢？扩展的话大家可以用cultural, economic and even environmental cooperation.
(27) 2008.7.26（同类合并)
Some people think the main benefit of international cooperation is in protection of the environment, while others think that the main benefit is in the world business. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
(28) 2008.8.09
task1 : a column chart, about some countries' numbers per 1000 people of using mobile phones and personal computers.
task2 : government encourages industrial and business move out of the large city and into the regional areas , do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
(29)2008.8.16
Some people think the media should not report details of crimes to the public.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(30)2008.8.31
Some people think that international travel makes them prejudiced rather than broad-minded. Give the reasons why people fail to benefit from such travel and how to improve the understanding of countries you visit.
分析：该题目的话题为international travel, 应重点放在“游客未能从国际旅游中变得思想更为开放和宽容，而是增加的对当地旅游国的进一步的偏见”来论述。同时必须给出解决国与国互相理解的解决方案。可以说，全文应围绕“international travel" "prejuced " "not broad- minded", "fail to benefit""how to improve understanding"这几个关键词展开论述。如果在文章有过多的篇幅在论述“international travel"给人们带来的好处的话，文章就很难上7分了。其实该题隐含的话题是'cultural conflict" 和“cultural communication" 即是是'cultural conflict"导致“fail to benefit from international travel" 和如何在国际旅游中采取有效措施来促进“cultural communication" 由于目前的写作考题， 尤其是A 类写作考题在题目中给出很多信息关键词，并且规定的写作范围越来越狭窄，从而让很多考生载在写作审题这一关，也让背诵了大量的范文的“烤鸭”失去了用武之地。而类似的话题在05/03/05的考题中也有体现。 Some people think visitors to other countries should imitate local customs and behaviours. Others think the host coutry should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 该题在措词上就更加明确了。" visitors to other countries" "local customs and behaviours" " host country" " welcome cultural difference" 这些关键词，使得大部分考生知道如何“下手”，同时， "Discuss both views and give your opinion." 的指令，也让考生怎么写都不会有太大的失误。
(31)2008.9.6
Once children start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(32)2008.9.13
People all know it is important to protect the environment, but they make no effort to protect it. Why? How to protect the environment?
(33)2008.9.18
criminals are imprisoned,many argue think that education and job training should repalce the former to deal with criminals.To what extent do you agree?
这可是我自己收集的08年大作文哦！还有老师分析的思路！！

雅思的作文没有上5.5，估计是有一下几个方面的原因：

1. 语法错误太多了。一般一篇语法错误超过三个就要扣分了。

2.逻辑条理不清晰，雅思考试很注重逻辑的。

3.用词的重复性太高，没有什么新意。或者用词口语化。

要进步的话，可以：

1. 多练习小作文，小作文拿高分的几率比较高。小作业到6，大作文5.5，这样总的上5.5的希望比较大。

2. 语法要多注意，特别是第三人称单数什么的。

3. 多积累。可以去背一些优美的范文，好的词语的搭配组合。尽量有几句复合句子，和闪光点。

4. 如果有老师给你批改作文就更好了。