中国人写雅思作文的大忌：中式思维 Ken老师点评:雅思作文学生习作(1)

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了中国人写雅思作文的大忌：中式思维 Ken老师点评:雅思作文学生习作(1)，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

中国人写雅思作文的大忌：中式思维

一、词汇贫乏，用词单一，表达呆板

雅思考试要求考生的词汇量在8000个以上，而这其中有三分之一指的是阅读中的一些高难词汇或专业词汇，对于本站们写作而言，能够灵活高效地运用 5000词汇就已足够。很多考生中文功底扎实，思路敏捷，拿到雅思题目时也是有感而发，文思如泉涌，无奈囊中羞涩，词汇量有限，再多的想法和思路就如同茶壶里的饺子，有货却倒不出来，可谓是“只可意会，不可言传”。一篇250字的雅思作文让广大考生绞尽脑汁，搜肠刮肚，结果写出来的句子并没有准确高效地表达自己的意思。词汇量的贫乏就直接导致了考生在写作中用词单一，表达呆板，全文就是一些简单词汇的不断重复和累加，写作能力也可见一斑。有些考生一想起“ 产生，引起”，就习惯性用“produce”，却不了解 “promote, generate, trigger, lead to, result in”等词汇和短语的表达都有此意思，完全可以在写作当中进行词汇的替换。而简单词汇的重复不仅让文章在词汇上水平不高，通篇归于平庸，而且让一些能够成为行文闪光点的精辟思维和见解也黯然失色。

二、用词不当，词不达意，中式英语充斥全文

有些考生单词量不小，在行文中也能够做到词汇的同义转换，然而写出来的文章还是让考*夷所思，大跌眼镜，究其原因，主要是用词不够准确，chinglish大行其道，整篇文章就是考生想当然的一个汉译英过程，其结果也就可想而知。

许多考生在背词汇时，往往只是满足于知晓单词的中文意思，而不深究词汇的具体用法。英语的每个单词都有它的denotation(字面意思)和 connotation(内涵意思)，一些同义词在感*彩上可能大相径庭。并且，由于中西方文化和传统的差异，一些相同的意象可能负载着不同的文化内涵，而这些都是考生在写作中要注意的问题。

比如 说“slander, slim, lean, skinny, underweight, lanky”等词都有“瘦”的意思，而 “slander”是褒义的，“skinny”是贬义的，而“underweight”是中性的。再比方说, “dragon”(龙)这个意象，在中国人眼里是“吉祥，高贵”的象征，而在西方人的眼里却是“邪恶”的象征，从西方史诗Beowulf《贝尔沃夫》里那条邪恶的喷火龙Grendel就可见一斑。还有一些考生完全不顾及单词的用法和固定搭配，杜撰出的中式英语令人啼笑皆非，写作分数自然提不高。

Ken老师点评:雅思作文学生习作(1)

题目：Some people believe the fittest and strongest individual and team achieve the great success in the sports. Others believe success depends on their mental attitudes. Discuss on both sides. What is your opinion?

Sports, no matter what their scales are, are the combination of intelligent and psychological factors and physical power of team members. To pursue success in sports, these factors are all indispensable and interactive.
(Comments: 1.(Don’t repeat your mistakes!))

Some people may argue that the only determinant for winning a sport is the physical strength of the team members. Namely, the stronger the individuals are, the higher possibilities the team will succeed in a competition event. We have to admit that the majority of sports require team members to have fit and powerful bodies. However, we should also notice that competition with other teams is not fighting with them. It is hard to image that a group of strongest apes win a game against a team of higher intelligent creatures.

( Comments: 2.(Pay close heed to the fact that you should use the noun form to function as the subject !) (Object clause is a good choice, and the non-predicate structure is also acceptable, yet never confuse them!))

Intelligent and psychological factors, therefore, play another part of important role in sports. Provided that a team is equipped with the strongest team members, it is still less likely for them to succeed in one game if its members are pessimistic and lack of strategies in competing with other teams. One famous case which can illustrate the importance of mental attitude and intelligent factors is that the Chinese football team’s successful entrance in the World Cup. The motto of that team’s coach is that attitude determinates everything. With the guidance of their coach, Chinese football players finally won the entrance competition with the support of positive attitude and appropriate strategies.

(Comments: 3. (Excellent! Very good application of exemplification!)

(The original slogan of the Chinese football team is “Attitude is everything!”) What you used here may seem a little Chinglish.)

Intelligent and mental power and the physical strength of team members are mutually influencing one another. The advantage of physical condition may probably add confidence to team members and inspire their best psychological state. On the other hand, the optimistic and positive attitudes are most likely to stimulate the best potential of individuals and bring them encouragement and ultimately lead to success. It can therefore be arguably concluded that mental attitude and physical condition are both significant in pursuing a team’s victory.

Very excellent as a whole!

Just keep up the good work and do the same in IELTS exam!

Pay close attention to details!

Grades: 7

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