雅思OG写作Test4 Task2解析

为考生做了雅思OG写作Test4 Task2的解析。

雅思OG写作审题要(Task focus)
这道题属于大作文中的*类话题。题干指出了一个社会现象,即“在有些,越来越多的人们由于吃了过多快餐而导致健康问题。因此,*有必要提高这类食品的税收”。问考生是否赞同这个观点。这是典型的辩证型题目。考生需要提出自己的观点,并给出恰当的理由来支撑自己的观点。
雅思OG写作写作思路(Thinking before writing)
先从观点上来讲,考生可以放开思路,先考虑自己是否比较赞同题目中让*“增加税收”的方法,若
认为比较可行,那就想想理由是什么;如果觉得这个想法没有道理,那就需要讲出理由,同时给出自己的
观点。辩证类题目一般的结构是开头先讨论题目,表达自己是否同意题目观点,然后用二或三个主体段给
出理由,也可以写个让步段,后结尾段总结全文,给出自己的观点。这篇范文分为四段,段讨论了话
题背景,引出下文;二段从经济的角度进行讨论;三段从消费主体的角度进行论证;结尾段总结全
文,给出观点。
雅思OG写作范文演示(Sample *ysis)
Model Response
The growth of the fast food industry has, without doubt, impacted on the eating habits and the health of many societies around the world. Diabetes, high cholesterol, heart and respiratory problems are all on the rise due to fatty and sugar rich food. However, the question is whether higher tax would improve this situation or not.
From an economic point of view, higher tax might seem sensible. In countries such as the USA, Australia and Britain, the healthcare system spends a large part of its budget on people with diet-related health problems. It could be argued that these people have caused their own
illnesses because of their choice of food. In this case, why should they expect the state to pay for their treatment? The tax could help fund the healthcare system.
However, we also need to consider which socio-economic group consumes fast food as the main part of their diet. Statistics indicate that lower income groups eat more of this food than wealthier people. One possible reason for this is that fast food is far cheaper than fresh produce. This is because many governments offer large subsidies to farmers who provide products for the fast food industry, such as corn, wheat and beef. Fruit and vegetables, on the other hand, are not subsidised. Research suggests that many families simply cannot afford to buy healthy food or pay higher taxes on fast food. For them, fast food is not a choice but a necessity.
In conclusion, imposing a higher tax on fast food does not seem to be the answer. If the government chose to do this, it would only lead to greater poverty and families facing further hardship.
(278 words)
雅思OG写作范文亮点(Sample highlights)
1 段:讨论话题 引出下文
范文开头段先对话题进行了讨论,毫无疑问(without doubt),快餐业的增长(the growth of the fast food industry)影响了世界各地人们的健康和饮食习惯。接着用举例论证提出,由于摄入过多的高脂高 糖类食物(due to fatty and sugar rich food),糖尿病、高胆固醇、心脏和呼吸系统问题日益增多(all on the rise)。然而,要解决这个问题不在于是否需要提高税收。
后一句用了“the question whether...would improve this situation or not”清晰的表达了自己的论 调,生动的引出下文。
2 段:主体段一
从经济角度来看(From an economic point of view),提高税收可能些道理(sensible)。在美、澳 大利亚和英等,医疗计划健系统大量的预算都花在(spends a large part of its budget on)与饮食 相关的健康问题上(diet-related health problems)。有争议性的是(It could be argued that),的这 些疾病的人们是源于他们自己对食物的选择。这样的话(In this case),他们为什么要期待*来出医疗 费呢?税收应该用于完善医疗计划健系统(fund the healthcare system)。
这一段同样使用了几个的实例来进行论证,贴切有力。同时,还用“why should they expect the
state to pay for their treatment?”的句型提出疑问,发人深思,情感表达也更强烈。
3 段:主体段二
然而,我们还应考虑谁是快餐消费的主要社会经济群体(which socio-economic group consumes fast food as the main part of their diet)。数据显示(Statistics indicate that),较低收入人群比高收入者 消费更多的快餐。一个很可能的原因就是快餐比新鲜食物要便宜。因为很多*给予种植玉米、小麦、牛 肉等快餐原料的农民经济补贴,相反,种植水果、蔬菜是没有补贴的。研究显示(Research suggests that),很多庭就是*不起(simply cannot afford)健康食物或者为*快餐付更多的税。对于他们来 说,快餐不是选择,而是必须的(not a choice but a necessity)。
数据论证是这一段突出的亮点。"Statistics indicate that..." 与“Research suggests that..."并 用,使论证更具说服力。
4段:总结全文
总而言之(In conclusion),对快餐食品强制增加税收并不是个办法(does not seem to be the answer)。如果*这样做,那只能导致(it would only lead to)更严重的贫困(greater poverty), 庭会面临更大的困难(further hardship)。
后一句“it would only”的虚拟语气用的很好,是结尾段比较常用的句型,用以引出后果或提出希望 等。
结语
这篇范文结构比较新颖,并非辩证类作文传统的写法,段落内容安排生动,观点依旧清晰。举例和数据等论证法的使用贴切形象,充分有力。本文使用了大量的从句还有话题相关的词汇,可供考生积累素材。总的来说,这是一篇很有特色的文章,语言基调个性鲜明,非常建议考生模仿。
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